Welcome to English 120
Class Overview, WEEK OF SEPT 4th
This week we began talking about how to develop your writing with well-developed, clearly organized paragraphs. We expanded that discussion and studied, together, a sample essay (In Chapter 4) in three drafts to examine how one student was able to improve clarity, add details and examples, and deepen her analysis. This should be helpful for you as you begin to revise your own first drafts and think about all that you might do to make them clearer and more complex than you'd once thought possible.
By now, you should have completed 3 journal topics in your notebooks. Remember that each entry should be at least one full page.
Journal Topics as of 9/8:
1. A Time You Felt Danger
2. Are you a 'Nature' Person or a 'City' Person? This should be written in one paragraph (topic sentence, transitions, supporting reasons and examples).
3. A Time You Did Not Speak Up, But Wish You Had
Homework for Monday:
I passed back your essays on defining intelligence. Please revise these essays and type them in MLA FORMAT. Remember, that revising means that you are improving them, not just correcting surface errors. Here is a checklist. Before you touch the keyboard, consider the following:
1. Look at the big picture. Can you make some big changes, such as add or remove a paragraph, change your introduction, etc.? Don't keep text that isn't working.
2. Do you have a thesis statement yet? You should have a sentence that effectively sums up all your main ideas. This sentence often is found at the end of your introduction.
3. Are your body paragraphs clearly focused with one main idea? Do they have topic sentences?
4. Have you included transitions to improve logic and flow?
5. Do you have examples to back up your observations? Are your examples told with clear descriptions and vivid details?
6. Have you included enough details about your thoughts and the meaning/significance or your examples? (analysis)
7. Can you add a relevant quotation to boost any of your points? Have you cited your source in a Works Cited list? (Optional for this paper)
8. Have you carefully proofread your final copy? It helps print out a draft and read it aloud with a pencil in hand. You'll be surprised at how many errors you catch this way.
A. SENTENCE CLARITY: Do all sentences make sense?
B. CONCISION: Are all sentences worded as tightly as possible with exact wording?
C. Is each sentence a complete sentence, not a fragment, with a subject and verb?
D. Are your verbs in the correct tense and form?
E. Have you used the correct word form? Homophones are words that sound the same but have different meaning and spelling. You cannot rely on spellcheck! Make sure it's the correct word.
F. Have you checked for missing/correct punctuation? Commas, Apostrophes, Capital Letters?
Finally, after you have typed up your paper using correct MLA Formatting, please staple your paper copy to the back of your final draft. This paper is due at the beginning of class on Monday September 11th.